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作文题目:

Independent Writing TPO 34:

Do you agree or disagree   with the disagree with the following statement?

Educating children is a  more difficult task today than it in the past because they spend so much time   on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.

Use specific reasons and   exemples to support your answer.

作文内容：

Recent years, with the   development of technology, more and more high-tech products come into   people’s eyes. Those products are designed with various functions, which make   our live much more convenient and colorful. For example, people can use cell   phone and social networking website to communicate anywhere with any people.   And interesting online games give people much pleasure in their spare time.   However, in my point of view, those products make educating children these   days a more difficult task than in the past.

First of all, those new   products make teaching professional knowledges more difficult. Because

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