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2016.06.04 ATask 2 范文


It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think disadvantages of such a development outweigh advantages?

【纳尼?这是什么怪题呢?初初见这个题目,无忧小雅哥和悉尼雅思姐也觉得其实并没有那么好写,看似好像只是car/TV/fridge,但其实要写清楚advantagesdisadvantages好像并没有那么容易。】



In a society of materialism, a lot of people want to have more in life. Modern technologies like TV’s, fridges and cars were luxury items that have become necessities of today. There are both pros and cons to this, but the latter definitely outweighs the former.

【作者在introduction段就给出了自己的观点:the latter(cons) definitely outweighs the former(pros). 烤鸭们也可以参照这个方式写,清晰给出自己的观点。】


On one hand, consumerism in wanting a fridge or a car can be seen as a benefit that drives society today. In most countries around the world, capitalism has allowed nations to thrive economically. For instance, the demand for cars globally has resulted in burgeoning Japanese car manufacturing industries that provide employment for thousands of people to produce vehicles in bulk. This has particularly benefited Japanese businesses like Toyota or Honda, and when in high-demand mass production is enabled, the cost of items decrease and consumers ultimately benefit.

【首先,这段作者讲的是Pros。对于汽车的需求,让不少的厂家得以发展,也提供了数以千计的职位,ToyotaHonda就是两个不错的例子。当大量生产的时候,产品的cost会降低,那么消费者当然会得益。在自己写文章的时候,也可以用can be seen as a benefit that…这个句型来替代千篇一律的be beneficial…另外,类似于thrive economically, in bulk, in high-demand, mass production都是各位烤鸭小伙伴们值得学习积累的词汇哦~



On the other hand, wanting worldly goods like TV’s and gadgets has resulted in a society of excess, and in some instances have altered the way some people live these days. For example, we would be hard-pressed to find families who do not have iPad electronic tablets, multiple mobile phones and even sometimes a few TV’s in a single household. It is clear that people have become accustomed to wanting more and more, rather than be satisfied with basic necessities we already have. The negative aspects of consumerism is thus palpable.

【作者的观点是cons outweigh pros,那么这一段就要来说有什么disadvantages——Result in a society of excess/alter the way people live。作者认为,不少家庭都有几个电视机,几个tablets。人们也不再满足于基本必需品,而是想要得到的更多更好。】



The disadvantages of buying more goods than we need definitely outweighs positive aspects. The environment has been affected the most in our desire for materialistic items. Sadly, as advertisements promote the ‘need’ for newer, better models of TV’s and cars, society has similarly abided by buying them regardless if they need to or not, leading to greater disposal of electronics and plastics that are damaging the planet.

【说完了pros and cons,现在就要解释一下为什么outweigh。可以说,环境问题是影响最大的。由于广告会不时的促销那些所谓的必须”, 人们购物不再根据自己是否需要来做决定,这样会导致大量的剩余,从而影响环境。Has been affected the most, abided by, regardless if, leading to, greater disposal of, damage the planet 这些词句,大家可都有摘抄?】



In conclusion, I believe from the points above that whilst there are benefits to consumerism, the negative effects it has on people’s behaviors as well as the harm made to our environment exceeds the advantages.

【结尾段,作者再次重申自己的观点,paraphrase自己的理由~ 简洁,清晰!】


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