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2016.07.09 A类Task 2 范文

Studies have suggested that children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons and what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?

【上周六的考题不算是新题啦,关于孩子为什么会花更多的时间在看电视上,以及有没有什么办法可以让孩子在active/Creative的事情上花更多的时间呢?典型的教育类话题,典型的reason and solution的题型。各位A类的烤鸭们有没有正常发挥呢?这道题目,其实乍一看好似不那么容易构思idea,但其实如果能往细节点想,能往深入想,idea其实并不难哦!让我们来看看,这篇高分范文是如何构成的吧!】


It has been suggested by many that children nowadays spend more time watching television programmes compared to past generations, with less of them who engage in sports or creative activities. This essay will discuss the reasons for this and what measures should be taken to encourage the latter. 

【非常简洁明了的开头,并没有用什么多余的花哨的写法来写Introduction段。其实,一个花哨的开头段并不会给你加分多少,考官想看到的只是一个简洁、明了、直入主题的Introduction。所以,太过fancy太过华丽的开头就真的不必了哦!】



The main reason why youths spend much of their time watching television more than before is due to greater accessibility to TV’s and shows. These days, TV’s are comparably cheaper than 20 years ago due to greater supply and demand in markets, hence making them very affordable. Furthermore, there are more platforms available on TV these days to watch an even greater variety of shows, via subscription services like Foxtel, Netflix, and Stan. For instance, families these days have more than one television set at home, and subscribe to lots of TV channels that are available on Foxtel. Thus, easier access to TV’s and programmes are reasons why children spend more time watching TV rather than do other activities.

【由于文章的问题是,为什么孩子们都会花很多时间来看电视,所以这一段作者是在回答WHY。因为现如今的电视节目花样都很多,而且看电视这件事情也比以前来的普遍和方便的多。有了类似于Foxtel, Netflix这类的平台,看各类电视节目也会方便许多,所以孩子们都会花更多的时间来看电视,而不是花在其他活动上了。这段中,大家可以学习摘录的词句和句型,都已经highlight了哦~ 各位烤鸭小伙伴们可以参考一下!把他们变成自己的~】



The best ways for children to be active or creative in other fields is by enforcing this at home with parents and at school with teachers. Adults should monitor and limit the amount of time their children spend watching TV, as well as participate in other activities together with them. Many Australian schools, such as Scotch College and Haileybury, these days also encourage children to be active by holding sporting events every weekend or participate in music clubs. It is hence from the collective effort of teachers and parents that can help students spend more time being creative and sporting rather than watch excessive TV.

【答完了Why,现在要回答solution了。作者认为,如果想要让孩子在其他活动上花更多时间,那么就需要家长和老师的共同努力。例如墨尔本的名校Scotch College 和Haileybury,都会在周末的时候定期组织一些活动,比如sports events,比如music clubs。这段中有不少大家可以学习的短语哦!例如the collective effort等等~ 】



In conclusion, from the aforementioned points, children spend a lot of time watching TV these days due to accessibility. However, measures to reduce this and get them out of the house require the help of proper monitoring and encouragement by adults.  

【结尾段,同样的不需要花哨,只需要“完成任务”即可。总结前文观点,适当的更换一下用词和句型,就可以了哦!】


其实写作高分并没有大家想象的那么难拿,虽然考验大家的审题、逻辑和词句的能力,但是大家只要能掌握正确的写作技巧,正确的努力方向以及正确的练习方法,那么屠雅成功真的指日可待哦!


 

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