雅思大作文赏析——合作还是竞争?

2016年09月18日 雅学粉思


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特别提醒

合作还是竞争?是雅思考试中的热门话题之一,曾经以不同的形式多次出现在雅思考试中。

 


写作点拨

此题要求考生就“是否应该减少校际间的体育比赛”发表自己的看法,是典型的观点类雅思大作文题。此篇范文使用了最传统的观点类议论文的写作方法。范文分为四段:首段开门见山地给出做的观点,即不应该反对校际间的体育比赛;第二第三段例举不同方面的论据,证明了体育比赛并不会引发学生之间的恶意竞争;末尾段在重申作者的观点的同时,还给出了相关的建议。



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题目

有人认为我们应该少鼓励学校间的体育比赛,因为这些比赛往往会导致学生之间的竞争,而不是合作。你是否同意这样的说法?


Some people say that we should not encourage sports games among schools because they lead to competition rather than cooperation. To what extent do you agree with it?



 

Sports games among schools are common nowadays. Most schools have footballs, basketball and other teams to take on the challenges of other schools. Unfortunately there have been reports on hostility(对抗,敌意,n) and even violence resulting from inter-school sports events. But this is not reasonable enough to ban sports games among schools.

 

The claim that sports lead to competition rather than cooperation is only a lame(没有说服力的, adj) argument. It is true that students often go all out to beat their opponents and feel mortified(使丢脸,v) when defeated. But when the game is over they often shake hands or even hug each other because there is no ill will(恶意), no disdain(轻蔑,n) or condescension(谦虚, n). Everything is done fair and square. When they part with each other, they are left with respect for the other side and maybe the wish for another game. The much-dreaded vicious(凶残的,adj) competition and animosity(仇恨,n) are always the result of unfair games or rogue teams, which are few and far between and don’t represent the whole picture.

 

On the contrary, those games are conductive(能传导的, adj) to cooperation and progress. When such an event is organized, all students often participate in one way or another. They are united by a single aim: to defeat the opponents and have a good time. They start to cooperate and help each other; a sense of community begins to grow. In addition, given the nature of mankind, no great progress is to be expected without some external or internal pressure. Competition is often desirable because it leads to progress. The desire to win is a strong incentive(动机, n) to push for one’s limit. The sense of honor acts as a powerful drug to assuage(减轻, vt) pain and fatigue(疲劳,n).

 

Measures should be taken to curb(控制,v) the occasional violence related to inter-school games. But we need not have any qualms(疑虑,n) about championing(捍卫, v) such as events, for the competitions on the sports field always contribute to progress and cooperation.





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